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Laguna Rising
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« on: March 23, 2008, 10:59:01 PM »

This is just a pre-mix version to let you know I'm alive and well (err.. I mean working for this project Wink )

I NEED your contribution (advice) to get a decent mix.
Feel free to criticize it - we can't have a bad sounding track in our project - so spit it out
Let me know if it works for you Undecided

of course, this is my own interpretation of the theme...  Roll Eyes

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* LagunaRising_LiquidWorld.mp3 (4664.81 KB - downloaded 206 times.)
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« Reply #1 on: March 24, 2008, 03:15:07 AM »

Well it's 3am here so I'm listening relatively quietly Tongue

The tune certainly fits it's title, and I can't really hear anything out of kilter in the mix. I'll give it another go later today when I can wind the volume up some Smiley
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« Reply #2 on: March 24, 2008, 03:05:16 PM »

... 12 hours later Smiley

Had another listen. Still can't hear anything wrong with the mix. It seems well spread spatially and the instruments seem clearly defined. I really like the way it starts.

However, stylistically it seems to keep building up but never arrives, if you see what I mean, then rather abruptly ends.
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« Reply #3 on: March 24, 2008, 03:56:35 PM »

oK, THANKS !  Grin
I'll wait a couple of days before coming back at it
hopefully I'll be more objective and open-minded

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« Reply #4 on: March 24, 2008, 06:10:47 PM »

Nice track, Laguna. Lots of good ideas.

I don't totally agree with Folderol. I think the mix could do with a bit more stereospread. At certain places there's a lot going on and it would provide a clearer mix in these busy parts. Some of the leads could do with a bit more reverb or even better some delay to make them sound smoother.

The ending is a bit abrupt and undecided. So compositionwise I would return to the part 0:22-1:00 at the end of the song and then close with the 0:00-0:22 part. That would make it more complete I think.
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« Reply #5 on: March 24, 2008, 06:23:58 PM »

Thanks a lot Martin ! you're advice from outside is useful (...and convincing...)

so let's make a list :

- Check Pan position of every track
- Try delay on moog leads (or rev)
- Try to come back to the starting theme for the ending (yes, 2 of 2 don't like it Undecided)

Let's see if other regulars come up with more comments.
I'll get back to it after a week rest (to better focus on it)


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« Reply #6 on: March 24, 2008, 06:56:14 PM »

Thanks a lot Martin ! you're advice from outside is useful (...and convincing...)

so let's make a list :

- Check Pan position of every track
- Try delay on moog leads (or rev)
- Try to come back to the starting theme for the ending (yes, 2 of 2 don't like it Undecided)

Let's see if other regulars come up with more comments.
I'll get back to it after a week rest (to better focus on it)


Cheers

Hold on. I didn't say I didn't like it.  Grin There's already lots of good stuff in the song. I just felt there's room for more good stuff. Grin
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« Reply #7 on: March 25, 2008, 08:19:08 PM »

Some re-evaluation may be in order - I like the idea of some stereo separation and a bit of delay here and there to smooth things out - but don't be tempted to mess with perfection. The average listener may have difficulty relating to the L.R. vibe, but be careful not to water down your sound, Maestro  Grin

It's your style - that whole build-up from serene beginning to a full-throttle joy-ride, ending suddenly with both feet on the brake pedal.
Pure Laguna Rising - accept no substitutes....  wOO
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« Reply #8 on: March 25, 2008, 08:55:18 PM »

 Shocked Thanks a lot for the compliments Oren !  Embarrassed
As I told, I'm waiting until the end of this week to approach it with 'fresh' ears...
...and I'm taking note of your suggestion.

Cheers  Grin
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