Dark Waters

[elv]

Still working on this one, any suggestion welcome

Ok here is the final version...hopefully
http://www.wusik.com/song.php?id=1535

[Laguna Rising]

Hi elv
the title 'Dark Waters' seems appropriate to me, with this darkish feel.
I'm unable to think of suggestions, 'cause it sounds very well to me, I wouldn't change anything.
it could use some refinement as in drum-fills or little melodic lines.
I hope someone else here can be more helpful 
Excellent beat

Cheers

[one]

Hi elv

Y'all been busy lately

Nice tune, real hyper for you..

Could use a lead melody IMO..


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[Wyatt]

elv..
..interesting..I listened to it several times..even messed around with some guitar along with it.

..I like the way it evolves and @ :30..it opens up nicely..I like that.

..@1:22 you go into a softly menacing bit..made me think a real dangerous kind of
cataclysmic ending might be nice.

..I'm new to this, but you're catching my ear.

Wyatt

[elv]

Thanks for listening guys.
@One and Laguna
Yeah been trying to have some melody at top, but it very hard to fit to the sound
@Wyatt
I would be interseted to hear your guitar on top.

[elv]

New version
http://www.wusik.com/song.php?id=1535

Also in first post

[Wyatt]

Thanks for listening guys.

@One and Laguna
Yeah been trying to have some melody at top, but it very hard to fit to the sound


@Wyatt
I would be interseted to hear your guitar on top.

Haha..so would I, elv..it was getting better, and inch at a time..and then I think I got it too monsterous..

..got 15 tracks in the air by the end of the morning, and think I ruined it somewhere along the line.

..anyway I am listening to your final version, and it seems stronger all the way through..

I like it..interesting music.

Wyatt

[Laguna Rising]

I am listening to your final version, and it seems stronger all the way through

Definitely cool ! flawless tune with the good addition of a nice ending

Cheers

[elv]

Thanks for listening the second time, I know I am asking for much
Wyatt I still would like to hear your version .
And Laguna thanks a million for listening and commenting

[elv]

Wow Wyatt, that was so not I was expecting.
Pretty cool how you made my song a bacground for yourself, and christ you made it so Darker, sound like a nightmare version of the track, thanks for sharing.
Always great to hear how people "hear" my songs.hehe keep forgoting that we dont hear the same things from the same sound/music

[Laguna Rising]

we dont hear the same things from the same sound/music

You're damn right, elv !

Thanks for listening the second time

My pleasure 

oh, it's nice to listen to it a 3rd time, I agree this is darker than the original, and a bit different...
Very original and wicked version 

Cheers

[Wyatt]

..and then I think I got it too monsterous..

..got 15 tracks in the air by the end of the morning, and think I ruined it somewhere along the line.

..anyway I am listening to your final version, and it seems stronger all the way through..

I like it..interesting music.

Wyatt

oops..yeah..like I said before^^^^^^^^  ..>shrug<

[jura]

Great ! Nothing to talk about. I'm enjoying it.

Thanks for sharing !

[elv]

Again thanks for listening and commenting

[Wyatt]

This is what I did with the original version..the suggestion of dark waters is an powerful one for me, because of larger than life experiences on the sea..there was a suggestion of the ominous, which I extended to the overwhelming..yes, I did put a bit of a large footprint in it.

This music is fascinating to me, and being new to this genre, I keep hearing layers, that I'm not quite sure how to achieve..so I tried to weave some guitar tracks through the center of it, to either side of it and around it..and by the time it got this far, I had rather filled it up..by now it sounds more like it should be in dark and evil..It reminds me of painting..if you don't stop in time, things tend to get darker.

..anyway this is what I did with an electric guitar, an electrc razor, and a multitrack recording software.

..I had thought about backing  this version down..taking out some tracks, but then I heard elv's new version, and  decided to leave well enough alone, since it wasn't my song in the first place, and the new version seems so complete in itself.

As for the new version:

 I like the structure..intro starts out with a nice bass..then developing the main theme..a shorter interlude swirly and a little ominous, but the bit of danger is underneath..then the main theme longer, and an ending that eases me out..I like it better and it isn't so dangerous as where I went with it..you get to go on a journey through dangerous waters with the new version, but you get to stay in the boat!!

Bravo..great job.

Wyatt