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shrikant
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« on: November 14, 2010, 07:23:11 AM »

This one is  for the KVR Contest.

The title is borrowed from my favorite movie,Landscape in the Mist.

Thanks to Kara and other friends for the support.Please do let me know what you think of it.

* 1011_shrikant_ Landscape in the Mist.mp3 (4172.31 KB - downloaded 342 times.)
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« Reply #1 on: November 14, 2010, 11:38:20 PM »

The sounds are interesting, and the production is top-notch.

As a listener, I am most attracted to a composition when it has structure and an over-all direction - a theme that draws the listener along and makes some sort of artistic statement.
This production seems aimless, meandering, without discernable purpose. (unless that is the purpose...? Cheesy)

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shrikant
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« Reply #2 on: November 15, 2010, 02:26:50 AM »


Thanks Oren,for listening and giving your opinion. It seems I have always had this
problem with structure and meaningful content. Let us see where I will go from here !

Thanks once again. That was invaluable.
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« Reply #3 on: November 20, 2010, 07:15:55 PM »

I agree with Oren.  You have some really good sections here but there is very little continuity between them.  You may try taking a section and repeat it a couple of times with a variation in each repeat.  The variation can be as subtle as a couple of note changes, using a different instrument, etc. or as extreme as doing both and adding a harmony part, a counter point, etc. There are not set rules but the playing field is wide open if you use your imagination.

You do have some great sounds here and your production is excellent.  It’s just the song structure is lacking IMHO.

Just my two cents.
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« Reply #4 on: November 21, 2010, 10:07:32 PM »

This comes over very much as a story-telling piece of music, but I would expect it to be the support for an animation of some sort. I do like the way your style is developing.
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« Reply #5 on: December 04, 2010, 04:45:44 AM »


Thanks Mario and folderol. Let me see how best I can improve my work. I was not able to access the site
due to some technical problems. Hence my reply is delayed.
Thanks once again.

shrikant
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