The state procession : Certainly puts the mood in place, i could directly imagine what you where telling. I missed a bit a sad very slow melody popping in.
The old man : Smooth transition from the previous part. Great sound, very visual
Runners in the park : Sound more like horses in the park
I don't mean it's bad, but a four step arpergio supposes 4 legs, so I was rather thinking about horses then about people running.
Marching Band : Excelent, that tuba gives the rythme as he should.
Overall, you did a great job. It realy puts in place what you descibe, very well done.
The whole piece is very coherent with perfect transitions between the different scenes.
Thanks for sharing here
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