Another unfinished song - Teaching Dogs to Fly

[Talvin]

Hey folks!

Hope you're all ok. As for me I simply have no time for making music whatsoever, which really Pi***s me off. Maybe at the beginning of next year...
Nevertheless I started (another) new song which I "only" have to finish. I'd be happy if you would give me some feedback on it.
I hope to be back soon.

Have a nice December/Christmas Time,

Tal

http://www.myspace.com/talvinjones

[folderol]

This sounds good to me so far. I hope you have such a boring time now that you are compelled to carry on with it 

[kara]

Interesting 
At the moment I have 2 remarks 
- I'm not so fun of the comping style of the guitar that comes in at 0:35 ?
- The mix will need some work. I realy have to concentrate on what you are singing to understand the lyrics. I've listened with headphones and still don't understand every word....


Hope this helps

k

[Talvin]

Thanks for your comments. I'll see what I can do. 

Kara, do you mean the rhythm guitar that also sets in in the first verse? I think the timing is a bit unprecise, which is not a problem since it's a vst guitar and I can simply change that.

[kara]

Yep that's the one I mean

k

Thanks for your comments. I'll see what I can do. 

Kara, do you mean the rhythm guitar that also sets in in the first verse? I think the timing is a bit unprecise, which is not a problem since it's a vst guitar and I can simply change that.

[Talvin]

I think it will sound better when the timing is more precise. Or would you change the rhythm?

[kara]

I think I would personnaly change the rythm 
Just my feeling, let see what others think of it

k

[Talvin]

Actually I think it's ok (apart from the timing), but maybe some others can post their opinions on that.

[Ed]

shit, it cut off, I think theres a real style on this, bit of a Nick Hayword slant to it without the brass stabs, but maybe some brass shots will work,
good start

[elwoodblues1969]

Hi Talvin,

The intro is flawless & it really hooked me in,but where the vocal track begins,I think toning down the guitar track with a muted-finger picking rif instead,would be an ideal setting for the vocals & there would be no need to raise the volume of the vocal track.

Along with this,I think adding a keyboard track with chord progressions would be a nice way to support the guitar rif I suggested.

I think these two elements would really accentuate your existing vocal track.

It's really off to a great start though-with that intro & I am looking forward to the finished product.

Elwood

[Talvin]

Thank you two for listening. 

I'll see what Real Strat can do...muted finger picking? Hmm...Are there any songs where I can listen to something like that. I'm not a guitar player...

[Wyatt]

Tal,

I like this one..I'll be interested to hear what you decide to do with it.

Wyatt

[Laguna Rising]

Hi Talvin
I thought this was a sketch, but I was wrong beacuse this track is already well developed. It's another interesting song and I hope you'll find a way to finish it soon. I won't comment on the mix and sound quality 'cause i'm listening on laptop speakers. About the rhythm gtr matter I think you should try to fix the timing first, and then eventually trying changing the part. If you compare two different parts I think it's easier to figure out what you really want from it (it works for me)
Well done so far 

Cheers

[Talvin]

Thanks. 

I'll correct the timing issue and will try to finish the song soon. Don't know about a different guitar part as I'm not a guitarist. I'm trying to play/program the guitars as authentical as I can, but if there's something peculiar about them please tell me.

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