Okay, this is much better. And, more interesting.
I have to insert that after listening to the 1st attempt, I orchestrated the song as a playalong using MMA. I certainly did not spend the time you guys have ... just a one-off quicky. Couple of things I discovered:
- the song we know as sung by Brook Benton is quite different from the sheet music. In fact, if you play the sheet in a lot of places you don't know that the songs are the same. This is nothing new
- I find that the "best" tempo for me is around 80 to 85 bpm. Lots faster that Benton and your renditions. All a matter of taste. And how good you are ... it's much harder to play something like this slow.
Back to It Ain't Raining.
I really, really like the intro.
At 0:14 you come in with a bassoon??? which is way-too-loud and way-too-low. You might want to try something like a trumpet. Higher tones carry a melody better.
The rest of the piece is just fine. I find it a bit over-orchestrated for my tastes. But, I think you're trying to do a big orchestra sound. So that's okay.
A few times you've using a wah-wah (like 2:28) and again near the end. I don't think it fits the overall mood.
My $0.25 suggestions: Speed it up, cut out some of the electronica, and raise the apparent pitch.
Hope this helps!