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FourthMansions
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« on: September 12, 2007, 06:56:13 PM »

I know it's not even the middle of September yet, but it felt like the right name for this tune.  Smiley

http://www.kara-moon.com/download_song.php?download_id=4392
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« Reply #1 on: September 12, 2007, 07:33:33 PM »

I'm glad that the kara-moon collective musicians get out of the protected space here Smiley
We need songs on this forum

Like this one.
Interesting piece, good melody and counter melody
A bit short perhaps ? Could evolve a litle more

Great idea

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« Reply #2 on: September 12, 2007, 09:34:14 PM »

Yes. Nice comfortable autumnal melody.

Nice clean sounding mix. I agree that it could do with a bit more development, and it seems to end somewhat abruptly.
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« Reply #3 on: September 13, 2007, 06:46:18 PM »

Thanks for listening guys - I'm glad you liked it.

Yes, I agree it needs a bit more in the way of development - unfortunately, I came to a brick wall so I thought I'd put what I had here and move on to something else for now.
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« Reply #4 on: September 13, 2007, 09:26:34 PM »

Good one FM. Seems like you've found a style of your own now with your latest tracks.
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« Reply #5 on: September 14, 2007, 06:52:55 PM »

Thanks Martin. Glad you liked it.
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« Reply #6 on: September 15, 2007, 07:45:15 PM »

This is very good!  Very nice lead lines and good sound choices. 

I do agree with the earlier statements about the abrupt ending. 
Polish of the ending and it would be developed, IMHO .

Very good work- MarioD
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« Reply #7 on: September 18, 2007, 06:17:31 PM »

Nice track FourthMansions !
I enjoyed it from the organ intro to the well orchestrated melodies, very evocative.
I like it and it seems complete to me (as lenghth and sense), probably other people here complain about the ending, which is too fast (compared to the former melodies that has a slower evolution), I'm not sure about the tecnicalities...
I like this autumn mood

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« Reply #8 on: September 18, 2007, 08:17:01 PM »

Thanks Mario and Laguna!

My own reservations are about the middle section - it seems to me to go back to the main melody too soon - I think it needs another 16 bars with a more contrasting feel. I'll come back to it in a month or so and by that time I should be able to see what it needs (if anything.)
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« Reply #9 on: September 23, 2007, 07:43:15 PM »

Good plan.

Sometimes I take many months to come back to a piece  Undecided
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