yrj77
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« on: June 09, 2008, 07:56:16 PM » |
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I have attached my first attempt at Trance/Club music. I'm mainly a rock-n-roll player, but I'm wanting to branch out to other styles. Any suggestions and critiques, positive or negative are welcome.
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« Last Edit: June 19, 2008, 03:29:58 AM by yrj77 »
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folderol
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« Reply #1 on: June 09, 2008, 10:37:08 PM » |
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Hi there.
I'm not really into Trance but, as well as I can tell, you seem to have the genre pretty well, with enough originality to stand out.
The percussion sounds a bit 'wooly'. It could do with being quite a bit sharper.
How about panning the vocoder effects?
Certainly a good starter anyway.
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« Reply #2 on: June 10, 2008, 06:54:37 PM » |
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Good starting. I think there is still a lot of room to work with effects. You've got some goods songs in there. I do miss some lead sounds though which can bring some more melody in the song. Just ideas off course...
Moon
P.S.: what happened at the end ? Kind of a sudden one... ?
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Laguna Rising
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« Reply #3 on: June 10, 2008, 08:19:40 PM » |
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Hi this one has all the right numbers for a trance music number...  I mean it sounds good, I enjoyed that Cool choice of sounds and nice arrangement Well done Cheers |
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yrj77
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« Reply #4 on: June 11, 2008, 04:47:53 AM » |
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Thanks for the suggestions and critiques.
Folderol,
Your right about the percussion. I'm working on ways to make them sharper. I also did want to pan on the vocoder, but so far I have not been pleased with the panning effects that I have. I'm using Tracktion 2, and I'm going to find out if I can auto-pan within the program itself.
Moon,
I was unsure about adding more parts (lead sounds) because I thought it might make things too busy. But I think you and some others clearly have a better grasp of the genre than I do, so if your suggestion is more parts then I will see what I can do. As far as the end is concerned; I really had no idea how to end the song so I just ended it, and I figured that if the ending was unusual for Trance/Club music then the more knowledgeable would let me know. That is the great thing about good and honest critiques.
After finding this website I knew that I wanted to join because of the learning possibilities. I was impressed with the range of musical styles that were represented, and I knew this was a place were I could learn and hopefully contribute to the collective's knowledge.
Laguna Rising,
Thanks for noticing the arrangement. I wanted to keep it simple but interesting enough (and hopefully different enough) so that it would be enjoyable for the listener.
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MarioD
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« Reply #5 on: June 12, 2008, 08:34:32 PM » |
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Hi yrj77,
Although I’m not very familiar with Trance/Club music I must say for a first attempt at this genre this is very good.
As previously stated I also believe the ending it too abrupt. That, IMHO, is the only thing that needs to be changed.
I also agree about the drum sounds and the lack of lead instruments. If this were to be on a CD I would certainly listen to the advice that has been given.
However I do believe this piece of music could stand on its own as background music for a Sci Fi, action or a horror movie. I think it would create a lot of suspense when used in the proper scene(s),
Overall this is really good.
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yrj77
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« Reply #6 on: June 18, 2008, 08:22:02 PM » |
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Hey everybody,
I made some changes based on some of your suggestions. I added more instruments and tried to sharpen up the drums. I definitely think the song is better so I am curious for your opinions.
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« Reply #7 on: June 19, 2008, 06:21:05 PM » |
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Although it was already good in the previous version, I think this is a major improvement.
More stuff going on, and so even more interesting but not confused: very good mix and separation.
Cool !
Cheers
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« Reply #8 on: June 29, 2008, 05:58:33 AM » |
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I liked this one.
Not sure if it would make it in a club, but certainly a good track with interesting variations.
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« Reply #9 on: July 05, 2008, 07:34:06 PM » |
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My knowledge of club music isn't all that great, but I'm working on it. I've decided to try and focus on creating some electronic music. I have some friends that I play with on occasion. The music we play is mainly guitar drive rock music, and we have begun to record some of our music. But we are having a few issues about the recording process. The issues are mostly mine so I have stepped away a bit and decided to go in a different direction for a time.
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« Reply #10 on: July 06, 2008, 12:18:59 PM » |
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Interesting improvements ! Do keep experimenting with sounds and tunes. You're creating your own styles and sounds and that's a good thing.
Moon
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