Fred,
Interesting composition & atmosphere,but with a couple of pronounced problems...the bass drum is a little over done & sounds distorted and the high hat(s) could be toned down a bit and perhaps the reverb could be reduced on the drum track as well.
There are some very infectious synth melodies in this,but it's drowned out by the over-implentmentation of the effects.
Overall as is,it sounds like a live production that was done in a gymnasium,which makes the music a bit incoherant.
It seems to me that you've saturated the entire production with reverb,so I think that if you back off on the effects a bit on the instrument tracks,clean up the drum track for a tighter sound and decrease the vocal level just slightly-I believe you'll articulate the theme of this song well,without losing the atmosphere of it.
Just offering some of my thoughts on this,so I'll leave the expert advice to mix master Oren...the main man,the zen master,the demi god of the studio world.
Some very nice ideas at play here..looking forward to hearing the tweaked version.
Cheers,
Thom