another little live demo

[Frederik]

I just made this other live demo (for the group I play in).
Just me playing guitar and bass, and then some singing on top. As always: It's just a few take thingy, I'm not a great singer (I'm just trying to give an idea on the melody) and the lyrics are not more then a sketch.
But nevertheless: do you think this song has potential (I was pleased with the guitar riff quite OK)?

all thoughts, comments and suggestions welcome.

bye,

Frederik

[Laguna Rising]

Hi Frederik
apart from your playing ability, which is good, I think there are good melodies, and song structure is ok, meaningful evolution, I'm not 100 % convinced with the vocals, I think they could better fit the rhythm and mood in some way... I don't know exactly how... small details anyway

If I can figure out something more I'll tell you 

Cheers

[Frederik]

thanks laguna, guess you're right about the vocal thing... I'm thinking of redoing those altogether - or maybe I'll let our real singer search something 

bye,

frederik

[kara]

Interesting combination of good guitar playing & an interesting voice.
With songs like that I allways have a hard time to decide to what to listen, the instrument or the voice.

A shame the recording quality isn't better

k

[Wyatt]

Frederik,

I think the guitar licks in this are perfectly wonderful..

Wyatt