[Exp] Visions of the marsh

[Laguna Rising]

I post the link to my entry for monthly contest on kvr so I can get some good advice and criticism 

Visions of the marsh

Remember: this is just for fun 

Cheers

[Martin E]

Another weird effort, Laguna. I don't know if my advice is any good. It's all about the effect you're trying to create. And my advice maybe counterproductive.

Anyways, the bubbly synth sound seems to be a bit loud in the beginning.

And I would try a larger sounding drumkit. This one sounds a bit mechanical. As a result the kick and the snare disappear in the louder parts.

Thirdly I can hardly make out any basspart.

So basically some adjustments in the mix would be useful I think.

[kara]

The intro didn't convince me, I was wondering where this was going
But once it went off at 0:19, i realy enjoyed it
Good chorusing with modern instruments.

The proof that jazz isn't dead yet

k

[rharv]

I think the tremelo-type el.piano chords are what is muddying it up. Either too loud or too wide of an EQ range on it.
 It makes some other sounds hard to hear clearly.  At least on the system I'm on now.   
Otherwise pretty inventive fun stuff.  Thanks for showing us this.

Try dropping the last note from drums(?) I think it would make it a more real 'jazz' type ending, if that is what you are after.
What was the objective for this months songs?

[Laguna Rising]

@Martin: thanks, very useful comments, it helps improving  - it's all good advice

Thanks Rony ! I'm trying to learn new styles, apart from my usual muddy rocking thing 

@Rharv: I see, I think eq'ing it a bit will help. This month's theme is Free-for-all, so I suspect there are many recycled themes and tracks. I did an experimental thing here

Cheers

[Wyatt]

That's really interesting..Inventive composition.

Makes for a good entry in 'free-for-all'..so much happening and yet it hangs together well.

Wyatt

[Laguna Rising]

Thanks for listening 

Cheers

[Fred S]

Hi LR! I've always wondered about you, but now I'm sure you've lost it

I really liked this!!! Hmmm...I wonder what that says about me

Wow!, that was really very (good) edgy 

[Laguna Rising]

Thanks Fred 
Your comment is always welcome (it's fun...)

Cheers

[Mellotronaut]

Yeah: inventive: that's it!

differently from Kara's opi i love the beginning a lot, this rough guitar-scratchy scratchy,... the drum-sound is quite special too: jazz from a whip...the synth/organ is Camelish/Peter Bardensic...really a weird combination of sounds...you know, i'm one of these .....

Great tune!

m

[Laguna Rising]

Thanks a lot Mello, I trust your opinion, and I'm glad you like it 

[magmavander]

Hi Lag,

I agree, the sound could be better.
But I liked the weird jazz you produced here.
It has a special mood, hard to define, like bizarre or coming from a paralelle universe 
Unexpected ufo 

Thanks!!

bye

mag

[Laguna Rising]

Thanks for listening Magma
well, weird jazz is a compliment,  I certainly can't keep on with you or others Jazz-masters here 
But this is my humble attempt 

Cheers

[magmavander]

Hi Lag,

well, weird jazz is a compliment

Yep! Totaly   

I certainly can't keep on with you or others Jazz-masters here

Why ? You have created your own universe in the jazz. That's great.
Now polish it a bit 

Thanks!

bye

mag

[Northern_Fist]

Hey Lag-man.

This stuff is totally ace!  Wow, it makes me think of some really messed up Sonic the Hedgehog zone for some reason.
It's so strange is abnormally beautiful!  Thanks for sharing.

The organs were planetary, man...  the guitars bogus, and the line-up and arrangement excellent!