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« on: December 03, 2022, 09:20:59 PM » |
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I've come up with the words to a song, but...
While it scans fine as spoken word, I can for the life of me find a tune to fit it.
So anyone want to have a crack at it?
There's an old dog sitting by the door,
Scratching at it with a shaky paw.
Telling me it's time to get about,
Have breakfast, then we're going out.
It's five long years to the day,
Since you up'ed and just went away.
We don't know what we did so wrong,
But miss you since you've been gone.
We ain't got so many years to go,
And think that's something you should know.
So please come back to us again,
And take us away from all this pain.
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If you have a poem, I have a tune, and we exchange these, we can both have a poem, a tune, and a song.
- Will
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« Reply #1 on: December 06, 2022, 08:15:36 AM » |
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I could do that no bother, Will. Right now, though, I'm out of action due to the dreaded flu ! Never felt this bad. Can hardly speak nor breathe and am just generally laid low. If nobody comes up with a tune for you I'll have a go whenever I get back a modicum of real life, mate.  |
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« Reply #2 on: December 06, 2022, 06:16:57 PM » |
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Sorry to hear you got the Flu - nasty stuff. Hopefully you'll be considerably better by Christmas.
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If you have a poem, I have a tune, and we exchange these, we can both have a poem, a tune, and a song.
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« Reply #3 on: December 06, 2022, 07:10:54 PM » |
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Oh, hope so. Had it over a week now and it ain't easing off!
When you wrote these words did it bring any style to mind?
On each read-through I give it speaks to me of ole-timey front porch music.
Pickin' a banjo in a lazy 6/8 time.
Couple more verses or a chorus might be nice, if'n ya have them in you?
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« Reply #4 on: December 06, 2022, 11:35:59 PM » |
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James, I hope you are feeling better soon. The flu over on this side of the pond is very bad, lots of people in the hospitals.
Will, you would not want to hear me sing so I will pass.
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« Reply #5 on: December 07, 2022, 02:05:16 PM » |
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@ James
Yes that's pretty much the style.
I'll try and think up a chorus - shouldn't be to difficult (he said hesitantly)
@ Mario
Join the club!
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« Reply #6 on: December 12, 2022, 09:19:56 AM » |
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I haven't forgotten this, but have been a bit tied up getting all my ducks in a row for my next bandcamp album (Yay!) oh and fixing up some cold spots in the house (Boo!)
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« Reply #7 on: December 12, 2022, 01:12:57 PM » |
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No hurry here.
Had this flu now for two weeks and still not pulling round!
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« Reply #8 on: December 13, 2022, 06:44:52 PM » |
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Sorry to hear this. Flu can indeed last a long time unfortunately. All you can do is keep warm and drink plenty of water.
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If you have a poem, I have a tune, and we exchange these, we can both have a poem, a tune, and a song.
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« Reply #9 on: December 20, 2022, 08:24:18 AM » |
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Hope you're on the mend James. Oh and I have a chorus  Chorus Please come back again real soon, We'd both be right over the moon. Don't leave us here all alone, In our sad and oh-so lonely home. |
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« Reply #10 on: December 20, 2022, 03:37:44 PM » |
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Thanks. Managed to struggle up to a half-hour studio time today so I may be able to get started on this one soon.  |
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« Reply #11 on: December 20, 2022, 09:48:06 PM » |
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Glad you're improving, but please don't push yourself too had for this.
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« Reply #13 on: December 21, 2022, 07:59:18 PM » |
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James, you have a winner here! Superb instrumentation and vocal. You and Will are the new dynamic duo  |
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« Reply #14 on: December 21, 2022, 09:36:02 PM » |
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YES! I like this  Especially the harmonising on the chorus. If possible, can you let me have the individual tracks? There are some small adjustments I'd like to make as well as possibly adding to it. |
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