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Laguna Rising
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« on: June 14, 2007, 08:40:21 PM »

I post the link to my entry for monthly contest on kvr so I can get some good advice and criticism  Wink

Visions of the marsh

Remember: this is just for fun  Grin

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« Reply #1 on: June 15, 2007, 09:19:12 PM »

Another weird effort, Laguna. I don't know if my advice is any good. It's all about the effect you're trying to create. And my advice maybe counterproductive.

Anyways, the bubbly synth sound seems to be a bit loud in the beginning.

And I would try a larger sounding drumkit. This one sounds a bit mechanical. As a result the kick and the snare disappear in the louder parts.

Thirdly I can hardly make out any basspart.

So basically some adjustments in the mix would be useful I think.
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« Reply #2 on: June 16, 2007, 08:01:50 AM »

The intro didn't convince me, I was wondering where this was going
But once it went off at 0:19, i realy enjoyed it
Good chorusing with modern instruments.

The proof that jazz isn't dead yet Cheesy

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« Reply #3 on: June 16, 2007, 10:49:20 AM »

I think the tremelo-type el.piano chords are what is muddying it up. Either too loud or too wide of an EQ range on it.
 It makes some other sounds hard to hear clearly.  At least on the system I'm on now.   
Otherwise pretty inventive fun stuff.  Thanks for showing us this.

Try dropping the last note from drums(?) I think it would make it a more real 'jazz' type ending, if that is what you are after.
What was the objective for this months songs?
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« Reply #4 on: June 16, 2007, 11:24:25 AM »

@Martin: thanks, very useful comments, it helps improving  Wink - it's all good advice

Thanks Rony ! I'm trying to learn new styles, apart from my usual muddy rocking thing  Cheesy

@Rharv: I see, I think eq'ing it a bit will help. This month's theme is Free-for-all, so I suspect there are many recycled themes and tracks. I did an experimental thing here

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« Reply #5 on: June 18, 2007, 09:33:12 PM »

That's really interesting..Inventive composition.

Makes for a good entry in 'free-for-all'..so much happening and yet it hangs together well.

Wyatt

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« Reply #6 on: June 19, 2007, 06:43:48 PM »

Thanks for listening  Grin

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« Reply #7 on: June 21, 2007, 01:40:05 AM »

Hi LR! I've always wondered about you, but now I'm sure you've lost it Grin

I really liked this!!! Hmmm...I wonder what that says about me Huh

Wow!, that was really very (good) edgy  Cool
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« Reply #8 on: June 21, 2007, 06:22:06 PM »

Thanks Fred  Grin
Your comment is always welcome (it's fun...)

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« Reply #9 on: June 23, 2007, 03:27:38 PM »

Yeah: inventive: that's it!

differently from Kara's opi i love the beginning a lot, this rough guitar-scratchy scratchy,... the drum-sound is quite special too: jazz from a whip...the synth/organ is Camelish/Peter Bardensic...really a weird combination of sounds...you know, i'm one of these ..... Wink

Great tune!

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« Reply #10 on: June 24, 2007, 05:24:28 PM »

Thanks a lot Mello, I trust your opinion, and I'm glad you like it  Grin
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« Reply #11 on: June 25, 2007, 08:24:10 PM »

Hi Lag,

I agree, the sound could be better.
But I liked the weird jazz you produced here.
It has a special mood, hard to define, like bizarre or coming from a paralelle universe  Grin
Unexpected ufo  Wink

Thanks!!

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« Reply #12 on: June 29, 2007, 07:00:09 PM »

Thanks for listening Magma
well, weird jazz is a compliment,  I certainly can't keep on with you or others Jazz-masters here  Embarrassed
But this is my humble attempt  Wink

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« Reply #13 on: June 29, 2007, 08:52:34 PM »

Hi Lag,

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well, weird jazz is a compliment
Yep! Totaly   Grin

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I certainly can't keep on with you or others Jazz-masters here
Why ? You have created your own universe in the jazz. That's great.
Now polish it a bit  Wink

Thanks!

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« Reply #14 on: June 29, 2007, 11:47:22 PM »

Hey Lag-man.

This stuff is totally ace!  Wow, it makes me think of some really messed up Sonic the Hedgehog zone for some reason.
It's so strange is abnormally beautiful!  Thanks for sharing.

The organs were planetary, man...  the guitars bogus, and the line-up and arrangement excellent!
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